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"you fell first
and i followed,
tumbled like bricks
in the wake of your
admiration,"

is the story i told,
and you agreed,
not remembering
the night i've tried
to dissolve: when i
lay on your bed,
dampened sheets,
counted perfections,
cut my sleeve,

and realized—
admiration
was my muriatic acid
when you hardly
knew my foundation:
i collapsed like bricks
already unstable.
some old writing, salvaged a bit
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
the title is rather confusing, though.
is this a coming of age poem?
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
that is

exactly what it is
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
do you mind explaining?
i'd like to understand
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
noted you!
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Student Writer
got it; thanks!
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012   General Artist
Ah, if only I could salvage as heroically as you can. This piece is a bit of written splendor:heart:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
thank you :heart: it was mostly just cuts and reformatting ;P
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012   General Artist
You are most welcome, love:heart:
Nah, it was mostly your magic :huggle:
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nicely done. I loved the ending question, that links to the final collapse to the beginning.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
i have the same comment
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