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i. earl and lady grey

gentle kin,
you have often graced me with your soft-spoken company, bergamot blossoms adorning your dark hair, fragrant as your steamy exhalations. you remind me of simple home and something untouchably elegant, pale and supple when i dress your skin with pallid cream and soften your thin, graceful hands. on a bleak winter evening, snow glittering by lamplight, you are a royal pleasure: a warm complement.


ii. darjeeling

bengali goddess,
i will lay you on the finest saris, those embroidered with gold threads and flawless diamonds that shimmer like your black eyes. you are the champagne of my harem, floral yet astringent, fine-boned cheeks seeking nothing less than perfection. your tiger soul knows your worth, seductive and mysterious; in the autumn, you remind me of leaves ripe with color, falling from my desperate touch: a distant lover.


iii. chamomile

virginal flower,
you are the sun's daughter birthed by soil, a celestial soothing who blooms playfully in bright fields. bathed in rosewater, you are the maiden teasing with impish laughter, your green fingers brushing mine when spring arrives cold and bitter. you whisper that sleep will come, that every season passes in its due time, that loathsome slush will melt and the earth will burst with beauty like yours: a steady centre.


iv. ginger

unabashed favorite,
you are the exotic spice with whom i wish to make a marriage bed. i will feed you sugarcane and honey, embellish our sheets with amber candies in the flush of a sweltering morning, and cool your flesh with ice and fresh peach slices. you settle the creases on my brow and bring to light the fires of my mind, delighting in the way my lips curve around a white porcelain cup to savor your affections: my muse.
i deeply, sincerely apologize to andrew marvell (but not really at all). i couldn't stop laughing while i wrote this.

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I was attracted by the title reference and I'm glad I stopped by because I quite enjoyed this :D It's so overflowing with detail and finds all the senses, something I really like in a written piece. I guess I'm just a sucker for imagery.

I like the idea of tea that you've used here - the types you've chosen really do sound like names and it's rather clever. I believe I've had all of these types except darjeeling, and the letters match my recollections of what each one tastes like. The entire piece feels very warm and comforting, exactly how tea should be :heart:

To me, the earl grey section is especially spot on as I've spent many winter nights with cups of that stuff and it's a perfect image you've matched to it :D I don't think there's a weak section at all; each letter has it's own charms and is very different from the other three.

If I wanted to be nitpicky, I'd complain about the lack of capitalization, but that's a stylistic thing and whether it appeals to you or not seems to come down to personal preference. I don't think the lack of them added anything for me, but I don't think it took away either, except to gnaw at my occasional grammar Nazi tendencies.

I think the only real critique I have is that, the tea theme aside, the sections are a little segregated. I feel like there's more story under here somewhere that could be teased out. And I guess that's not really critique, just me wanting more :XD:
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Manda-of-the-6 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Student General Artist
I like it, each description paints a different scenario and image. I have to admit that the last one made me laugh, but in a good way. Very nicely done.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
this was very facetious :B i'm surprised people have taken it seriously.
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:iconmanda-of-the-6:
Manda-of-the-6 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Student General Artist
I like it. :)
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
Congratulations on the DLD, darling! :love:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
thank you :heart:!
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
my pleasure, this piece is truly one of my (many XD) favorites from you :heart:
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:iconhavetales-willtell:
HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Professional Writer
:doh: I'm green.

Call it envy if you like; but I'm still going to go with green. :stinkeye:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
:heart: ;)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Professional Writer
:evileye:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
thank you :heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You know, I know I favorit'd this, but part of me is sad that you didn't go with your other idea.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
i ~did~ write it; excuse me while i muster the chutzpah to post it.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
YES YES YES -> if nothing else, put it in stash and send it to us
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Queen-Kitty Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   Photographer
This is pretty clever, I love the way you describe each "mistress" and keep the aspects of the tea still in there. Unique and beautiful work indeed!
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
thank you!
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:iconlacewinged-beauty:
Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer

I adore this :heart:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
thank you :heart:
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
Most welcome :hug:
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:iconvigilo:
Vigilo Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
This is utterly charming. I love the sort of tongue-in-cheek humour you have throughout this ("unabashed favourite" is my favourite!) - this is a wonderful read. :heart:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
thank you x) & for the :+fav:
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Phoenixario Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
Somehow I imagine many of the older english speaking poets rising up and slapping you with zombie like limbs amidst beautiful fields of flowers.

Very nice. :la:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
hahaha, thank you. and thank you for the :+fav:!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012   General Artist
I am a coffee chocolate and tea fiend mind you :heart:
Your stringing of words are always done so tastefully :giggle:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
thank you :heart:

i share 2/3. chocolate is too sweet for me :giggle:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012   General Artist
Just to be clear, I lean more towards bitter dark chocolate, you know :eyes:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
it's just something about the taste ): (thought dark chocolate is more palatable)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   General Artist
Haha, you're one of the rare few, then :lol:
Although I prefer dark chocolate best, chocolate is something I can never so no to, regardless of sweetness :giggle:
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stitchpunkz Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
[link]

cause I told you I would and though I'm not nearly done yet, I'm too excited
There it is
Your coy mistresses

Tell me if I at least got their essence right?
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
haaaa you did, thank you x)

to be honest, i didn't really the picture the "girls."
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:iconstitchpunkz:
stitchpunkz Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
XD

Told you a needed an excuse to draw food/drink gijinkas

And eh, this is sorta what I got in mind I guess

(or would you have preferred for it to be guys? :p Or just tea?)
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
i didn't have a preference! i was just stating i really didn't have an idea in mind.
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stitchpunkz Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
Oh sorry ok XD
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh...perfect. :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
:heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I *LOVE* that you stole his title. It adds a fun layer to this. Plus, I'm pretty sure he pulled that poem out at every lady as a panty-dropper, so this is a perfect homage.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
haha, exactly. ;)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I remember my 12th grade (12, you read that right) bringing this to my English class and him asking the class what they thought and the girls were like OH ITS SO SWEET and I was like ITS NOT SWEET ITS SO GENERIC HE PROBABLY USED THIS ON ALL THE GIRLS and the teacher laughed, ignored the second half of it, and was like, yes, this is a very generic poem, you can't tell who the lady is...

I think a lot of people miss that about the poem. (So it probably worked soooooooooooo well ha ha ha)
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
my twelfth grade english class was convinced hamlet and ophelia had a beautiful love story, so i believe it.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*face palm* scary, right?
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Will7744 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Professional Writer
you're a wordsmith, jorge - but you forgot green, jade in my hands, oriental flower - as for marvell - the grave's a fine and noble see/but none I think do there drink tea...
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
haha, thank you.
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:iconstitchpunkz:
stitchpunkz Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
Ermagerhd! Kale, stahp it!

Now there's even more added to my list of art-to-do
-_-

I am very cross with you
Go to your room and think about what you've done!
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
pfffft. thanks.
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:iconstitchpunkz:
stitchpunkz Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
Meh, you just gave me an extra excuse to draw food/drink gijinkas sometime
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aldwarke Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
Correction: for 'excellenr' please read 'excellent'. Must take more care.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
haha, i figured ;) typos happen.
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:iconaldwarke:
aldwarke Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
In poetic terms this is an excellenr conceit.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
thank you (:
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jaguaran Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
gaaaaaaaaaay
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