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i. earl and lady grey

gentle kin,
you have often graced me with your soft-spoken company, bergamot blossoms adorning your dark hair, fragrant as your steamy exhalations. you remind me of simple home and something untouchably elegant, pale and supple when i dress your skin with pallid cream and soften your thin, graceful hands. on a bleak winter evening, snow glittering by lamplight, you are a royal pleasure: a warm complement.


ii. darjeeling

bengali goddess,
i will lay you on the finest saris, those embroidered with gold threads and flawless diamonds that shimmer like your black eyes. you are the champagne of my harem, floral yet astringent, fine-boned cheeks seeking nothing less than perfection. your tiger soul knows your worth, seductive and mysterious; in the autumn, you remind me of leaves ripe with color, falling from my desperate touch: a distant lover.


iii. chamomile

virginal flower,
you are the sun's daughter birthed by soil, a celestial soothing who blooms playfully in bright fields. bathed in rosewater, you are the maiden teasing with impish laughter, your green fingers brushing mine when spring arrives cold and bitter. you whisper that sleep will come, that every season passes in its due time, that loathsome slush will melt and the earth will burst with beauty like yours: a steady centre.


iv. ginger

unabashed favorite,
you are the exotic spice with whom i wish to make a marriage bed. i will feed you sugarcane and honey, embellish our sheets with amber candies in the flush of a sweltering morning, and cool your flesh with ice and fresh peach slices. you settle the creases on my brow and bring to light the fires of my mind, delighting in the way my lips curve around a white porcelain cup to savor your affections: my muse.
i deeply, sincerely apologize to andrew marvell (but not really at all). i couldn't stop laughing while i wrote this.

for #Scribes-Are-Beckoned's Love Notes to a Simple Pleasure Contest: [link]
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I was attracted by the title reference and I'm glad I stopped by because I quite enjoyed this :D It's so overflowing with detail and finds all the senses, something I really like in a written piece. I guess I'm just a sucker for imagery.

I like the idea of tea that you've used here - the types you've chosen really do sound like names and it's rather clever. I believe I've had all of these types except darjeeling, and the letters match my recollections of what each one tastes like. The entire piece feels very warm and comforting, exactly how tea should be :heart:

To me, the earl grey section is especially spot on as I've spent many winter nights with cups of that stuff and it's a perfect image you've matched to it :D I don't think there's a weak section at all; each letter has it's own charms and is very different from the other three.

If I wanted to be nitpicky, I'd complain about the lack of capitalization, but that's a stylistic thing and whether it appeals to you or not seems to come down to personal preference. I don't think the lack of them added anything for me, but I don't think it took away either, except to gnaw at my occasional grammar Nazi tendencies.

I think the only real critique I have is that, the tea theme aside, the sections are a little segregated. I feel like there's more story under here somewhere that could be teased out. And I guess that's not really critique, just me wanting more :XD:
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MangaGirlNum6 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Student General Artist
I like it, each description paints a different scenario and image. I have to admit that the last one made me laugh, but in a good way. Very nicely done.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
this was very facetious :B i'm surprised people have taken it seriously.
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MangaGirlNum6 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Student General Artist
I like it. :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
Congratulations on the DLD, darling! :love:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
thank you :heart:!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
my pleasure, this piece is truly one of my (many XD) favorites from you :heart:
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Professional Writer
:doh: I'm green.

Call it envy if you like; but I'm still going to go with green. :stinkeye:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
:heart: ;)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Professional Writer
:evileye:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
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Keep writing and keep creating.
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