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i.

a dead bird rots,
stomach heat-split and picked on,
feathers stuck to the concrete
when he peels it up.



ii.

he pours kerosene,
holding one shaking match lit—
fat melts, entrails crisp,
marrow dries and bones crack,
ashes rise against the wind,
falling on gray buildings.



iii.

in his midmorning dream,
the phoenix soars.
inspired by: [link]
song suggested by: :iconstitchpunkz:
for this game: [link]

freedom is a weird idea to play with.
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:iconlacewinged-beauty:
Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013   Writer

This caught my eye first, out of the dozen you posted. I love it, especially that first stanza. Excellent work.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
thank you :heart:

i still have so many to work through~~
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:iconlacewinged-beauty:
Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013   Writer

You are most welcome :love:

I can imagine :)
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:icontristancody:
TristanCody Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Student Writer
Rather lovely. Much enjoyed.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
thank you!
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:icontristancody:
TristanCody Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Writer
You are most welcome!
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:iconfrencifry:
Frencifry Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
The vivid imagery is certainly captivating. o.o I swear, I couldn't stop reading once I got to the middle of it. :3 Beautifully written, and interesting indeed. *applause* Job well done! :D ~
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
thank you!
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:iconfrencifry:
Frencifry Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
Not a problem^^
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:icongliitchlord:
gliitchlord Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
if you pruned the double concrete at the beginning this would be unstoppable.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
fixed P:
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:icongliitchlord:
gliitchlord Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
;D

so long as you took my suggestion with the appropriate grain of salt.
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:iconaldwarke:
aldwarke Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
I like the very appropriate phoenix reference.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
thank you :heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this gave me eebie jeebies.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
burning flesh will do that P:
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Oh man, this is really something, Jorge. Fantastic image, and you could have easily destroyed the worth of this with the ending. But, no....just right. :thumbsup:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
thank you :heart:
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconstitchpunkz:
stitchpunkz Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
Gosh dA, why do you practically force me to comment? I'm not good with them

Anyway, this is interesting. At least I think so...
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
thank you :heart: glad you thought so.
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:iconlancelotprice:
LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
Ah, a religionist.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
i wouldn't say that P: more of a dreamer.
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:iconlancelotprice:
LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
That's what I said. A religionist dreams of what cannot be in reality, and pretends it's real. A dreamer knows it's not real.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
i'd say there's a lot gray area there P: especially if you take into consideration the connotation of both words.
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:iconlancelotprice:
LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
I think the grey zone is fairly narrow. :)
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
guess we just have a different philosophy there, haha.
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:iconlancelotprice:
LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
Ah, a religionist. :D
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
not uhm. at all.

i also don't think there's any indication in the poem that the narrator believes he actually did any good; he is, in fact, dreaming.
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