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feigning euphoria
on the outskirts of joliet,
i saw You between red glowing streams:
weaving the horizon like a tapestry,
recycling gold beads from a pale morning sari,
dyeing blue-violet fever, shivers

leaking from my head down my arms,
resting in my belly beside You—mixing veins in the night,
embellishing the road with thoughts
of creation: You spin a thread and it unwinds,
fraying at the ends where the cars break the asphalt

and i convulse,
spinning out of control—You doe-eyed like the kid
who crashed his mother's car and dies heavy beneath
that semi, stuck in the pitch dark, oil blearing opalescent
under the gaping taillights—streetlights—headlights—

Your light,
feigning euphoria
on the outskirts of joliet.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013   Writer
this is spiritual, in a way; i feel as though it hits me in a spot where few words are able to reach. it's astounding.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
thank you.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013
Featured!: [link] :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
thank you :heart:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
The images here are really lovely - I love the way that everything is moving. :heart: :coffeecup:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
thank you!
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
mixing veins in the night,
embellishing the road with thoughts
of creation: You spin a thread and it unwinds,
fraying at the ends where the cars break the asphalt


Ooh...
:heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
thank you :heart:
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Imagery is spot on as usual. Wonderful.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
thank you c:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful imagery.
I love how it circles back around.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
thank you :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
^^
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   General Artist
I love that you know just where when how to strike with your words, darling! How much more amazing and talented and sweet and and supercalifragilisticexpialidocious can one person get anywho? :tighthug:
Brilliant imagery and word choice, but then again those are the trademarks of your writings. :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
thank you :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013   General Artist
always, jorge love :heart:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: Great use of imagery. This is really incredible.
I particularly like the effect of the repetition here: "under the gaping taillights—streetlights—headlights—"

I liked this very much. :D


Also, Joliet? :O_o:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
thank you :heart:

also: [link]
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!

also: [link] ;)
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, Jorge....your imagery is top notch here. I love how visual this is.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
:heart: thank you.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
Beautiful use of color. :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
thank you!
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