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i.

we landed in oklahoma
and drank cheap martinis in the terminal;
you carried my guitar and fell in love
with my voice but not my tongue,
not my hands.


ii.

there's a man with a garage
that looks like a plane because nothing
meant more to him. will you make a model
of that bar? will you make a model
of my red cheeks? or will you live in a townhome
with her and three children?


iii.

the problem was you're not gay.
the problem was there was feeling
but it wasn't for us. i had you but
it wasn't for us.


iv.

i'm not sure if i resent you,
but i remember that bar and every pockmark
on the stool you sat on while i played
the song that parted your lips;
you remember every pockmark in oklahoma
like they were ours.
inspired by [link] for :iconohsparrowsong:'s version of the game i ran x) go check out hers here. [link]

very beautiful song :heart:
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Given 2013-03-09
terminal by *glossolalias reminds the suggester "of that contemporary voice of conversation" found in modern poetry.

Deviant also suggested by *xlntwtch. ( Suggested by tiganusi and Featured by neurotype )
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tigabelle Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
This is absolutely stunning work, Congrats on the daily deviation! :eager::heart::squee:
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013   Writer
Lovely little piece you have here, darling. :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
thank you! i'm still surprised it got a DD every time i look back at it.
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013   Writer
A lovely surprise, I'm sure. Hug 
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Professional Writer
you're part of "some clear tropisms for your frozen lines" here [link] :rose:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013
:heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats, Jorge!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thanks rachel :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
A wonderful piece, Jorge, which I find is more stunning than the song that inspired it. Congratulations! <3
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you! it's a good song, so that's a hefty compliment.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
And it's my sincerest opinion. :heart:
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Indigo-Serenade Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing... it seems so casual, and yet carries so much meaning! I love it!
Grats on the DD; it's completely well-deserved! :squee: :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you!
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Indigo-Serenade Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Always welcome! :heart: :happybounce:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   Writer
hey, congratulations on the feature! i feel like one could throw a dart at your gallery and could hit something DD worthy. as usual, your narrative is personal, imaginative, and engaging. :thumbsup:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you so much x)
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CMWVisualArts Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That, or they could throw a dart at their gallery and break their computer screen :la:

In all honesty, I agree. :nod:
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SuperAlphaWolf Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
this is so beautiful.
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you :heart:
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HipsterDragon Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
It's wonderful. Congrats on the DD!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thanks!
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Purple-Panda-SxR Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   Writer
Good god what did you just do to my heart.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
haha, thank you.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
All of them deserve to be expanded into either a longer poem, or a story. They are that good.
Amazing!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
mm, i think that this piece is good as is; if it was less succinct, some of the emotional weight would be compromised. however, there are plenty of longer narrative pieces in my gallery if that interests you.

thank you!
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
I get it!
Thanks for your explanation!
No problem!
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
This is brilliant and very amazingly written.
Congratulations on the well deserved DD!
:huggle:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you!
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Your welcome :)
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somethingsophie Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   Writer
Thiiiis is really gorgeous. Like all of your work. :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
awww sophie :heart: next time you're about, im me so we can start our collab i have an idea.
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Psyghostis Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD, mate! :D
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you!
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   Writer
Congratulations on the DD -- this is a beautiful piece.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you lisa!
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wordeea Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
congrats ! lovely piece
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you :heart:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Congrats!!
This is lovely. :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thank you x)
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neonxaos Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well done mate :)
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
thanks!
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY congrats on the DD ^^
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
thank you!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   General Artist
Congratulations, jorge love and brilliant piece! :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
:heart: thank you!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013   General Artist
mmhmm :heart:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Professional Writer
:clap:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
:)
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
That is a beautiful poem. Congratulations on your DD! :clap:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
thank you so much :heart:
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